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I.
Love has envenomed me as if strychnine,
yet I always sip it's luminous goblet,
it's lustorous shell, oh so argentine.
As I lift it's toxins to my lip,
I embrace myself for the journey,
and ready myself for the trip.

Oh, and how it conquers me,
runs rampant like a forest banshee,
and shreiks of the imminent gurantee,
that love will soon be lost,
Yet the poison still embossed,
upon my very core.
Until I find this antidote,
so as my heart and toxins
may slip from rapport.

II.
That this infatuation may subside
within the residues of reason.
Yet will heart and soul collide,
or simply commit themselves to treason?
That I may sip this counterpoison,
so that this everlasting yearning,
shall once become adhesion.
Let not your mind to spurning.
So your centre may be lead to turning.

That was this gaze into empyrean,
that you turn your eyes towards I.
May that single gaze by cytherean,
that one little gaze will
turn your psyche awry.
:iconthefireburningwithin:

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:iconmusical-nymph:
I think this is well written, but it's not the sort of poem I like.

It's vague and though full of detail, never says anything specific. I suppose this makes it relatable, but for me it's unapproachable.

The image of love being poison might border on cliche, but you've made it your own by expanding this idea- well done.

Fantastic word choice.

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You were right about the stars: each one is a setting sun.
:iconthefireburningwithin:
Thanks for the critique. When I first made the poem I wasn't really thinking of equating love to to poison as being cliche, but now that I think about it I guess it was a little cliche. Really the whole reason for the connection, though, was to sort of counteract the sappy love poems, while at the same time not be too dark. Also, I do agree that the poem is a little vague; really going into it though it wasn't a major concern of mine. The whole poem just sort of started as a experimentation of sorts. Thank you very much for the constructive criticism, though.

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"Isn't it true that you start your life a sweet child believing in everything under your father's roof? Then comes the day of the Laodiceans, when you know you are wretched and miserable and poor and blind and naked, and with the visage of a gruesome grie
:iconpsytatious:
Well written. Absolutly wonderful.

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I don't waste time on what I can't control.
:iconthefireburningwithin:
Thank you, glad to hear you liked it.

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"Isn't it true that you start your life a sweet child believing in everything under your father's roof? Then comes the day of the Laodiceans, when you know you are wretched and miserable and poor and blind and naked, and with the visage of a gruesome grie
:iconhayley-the-band-geek:
Wow. And I thought I had a vast knowledge of words. I lose.

"Oh, and how it conquers me,
runs rampant like a forest banshee,
and shreiks of the imminent gurantee,"

I love those three lines. I'm not sure why!

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"Are you telling me you did NOT get your first orgasm from an instrument in a musical aptitude enhancement camp?(...)I had you built up in my mind into a figure of Stalinist greatness. I AM SO SAD." -*TheIronWolf
:iconthefireburningwithin:
Thanks you, yeah the poem was really an experimentation with different and more descriptive words.

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"Isn't it true that you start your life a sweet child believing in everything under your father's roof? Then comes the day of the Laodiceans, when you know you are wretched and miserable and poor and blind and naked, and with the visage of a gruesome grie

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